My first original character!

amopatel1234 · newbie! Joined: Mar 20, 2005 Posts: 11 Location: London

yo guys and girls hows it goin, i took a break from copy pictures i try my hand at drawing my own he's called bob. i no it looks light thats because of the pencil i used, i just what you people thought of it and tell ways to imporve it.

thanks

[img:800:575:cf5d59da10]http://www.anime-source.com/upload/uploadFiles/BOB.jpg[/img:cf5d59da10]

meganekko · Posted: Fri Aug 25, 2006 3:12 am Post subject:

[img:320:200:322c58b903]http://img180.imageshack.us/img180/1394/peterpan1no1.jpg[/img:322c58b903]

Bob reminds me a little bit of Peter Pan... maybe the angle of the eyes? Confused

But still, thanks for putting that up~ It's kinda light so I can't see the details, maybe use a darker pencil, or rub harder~ Laughing

The eyes are great though, I can see the influence of anime like Magic Knight Rayearth:
[img:144:206:322c58b903]http://images.rottentomatoes.com/images/movie/coverv/05/257505.jpg[/img:322c58b903]

It lacks a bit of parallelism though... meaning, the eyes don't look the same. I know it's difficult, cause I had problems about why the eyes don't look the same~ Laughing

Practise makes perfect, draw more, learn more, just get that eraser handy~ Wink

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eduardoblanco · newbie! Joined: Aug 16, 2006 Posts: 16 Location: GUATEMALA

LOOCK GOOD¡¡¡

I have only two recomendations, I see a little long the neck and maybe other style of eyebrows, cause I try to imagine Bob with other expresions, and is dificult to do it.

I think you have high skills, you are creative, and go by the right way¡¡¡
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hazzard · newbie! Joined: Aug 27, 2006 Posts: 17

haha.. good attept on da 3/4 view.. dats always da hardest for me.. i always cant get it ryt... well it looks like u got sumtin over der... jus work on da eyes n ont make da cheeks to big in this kind of view... soo yeah.. nice.. n be careful with da eyes.. for me, das always da hardest.. n maybe add a lil bit more details... haha.. i hope im not makin u feel bad..

Atashi · Posted: Mon Aug 28, 2006 1:08 am Post subject:

How are you guys seeing this??

All I see is a line here and there and eyes!! All the lines are too light for me. X[

I cant make any comments. Sad

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meganekko · Posted: Mon Aug 28, 2006 1:17 am Post subject:

[img:500:554:4f90791f0e]http://img181.imageshack.us/img181/4765/bobeditedtd1.jpg[/img:4f90791f0e]

For the sake of people who can't see them, here's a darker version... I tried my best~ Laughing

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Atashi · Posted: Mon Aug 28, 2006 1:24 am Post subject:

THANX A BUNCH!! Very Happy

Yeah, so like eduardo said, the neck is a lil too long. XD

The smile is a lil too low. raise it up a bit? Very Happy

You know for the hair line you dont have to make one line, it looks weird especially for ones with 2/3 & 1/3 part. Instead make it like this \/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\

Something like that. This is ok. *thumbs up* More the draw the better it'll become. Very Happy

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trueline · Pure Hope Joined: Jun 13, 2006 Posts: 5134

nice drawing amopatel1234 but still it needs shading
ortherwise i dont have comments .its a good one.
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MysticalCardReader · newbie! Joined: Aug 29, 2006 Posts: 15

I have to say its a good drawing but as said each person is different lil tip draw a bar system with line kinda like this

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match 3 squares evenly place the eyes on the 2 out side squares
thats the easy way to get them to match.

then neck needs to be a bit shorter and the ear a little bit smaller
others then these helpful tips its great.
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MysticalCardReader · newbie! Joined: Aug 29, 2006 Posts: 15

[img:182:216:35c61f41f1]http://www.geocities.com/mysticalcardreader/testeyes.jpg[/img:35c61f41f1]

here is a fast exanple i did for you see the bars on the eyes.
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Vinz · Conscript Joined: Mar 18, 2006 Posts: 127 Location: Canada

its ok

continue working hard in ur drawing ... Smile

amopatel1234 · newbie! Joined: Mar 20, 2005 Posts: 11 Location: London

hey all well thanks for the comments they been really helpfull, well i try to improve bob with what u guys said and this is what came out i finished it a long time ago but been very lazy

[img:600:431:1ceaef9cc7]http://www.anime-source.com/upload/uploadFiles/bob2.jpg[/img:1ceaef9cc7]

so was an improvement?

i also did another character hasn't got a name yet im really bad at name!.

[img:1150:826:1ceaef9cc7]http://www.anime-source.com/upload/uploadFiles/NoName.jpg[/img:1ceaef9cc7]

so what do u think of this one?

xkrazydog · Heimin (Commoner) Joined: Aug 17, 2005 Posts: 96

You should add more detail to the hair. Also, for the second one >>;; Two different eyes are kinda cliche. And overly done.