new drawings (critism is needed)

shonenjumpgirl · Yari Ashigaru Joined: Jan 26, 2006 Posts: 226

these r my new drawings so far...

Orexdahb
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a close up
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Ethil with wings
[IMG:1152:768:f1dfe89643]http://i8.photobucket.com/albums/a30/Shonenjumpgirl/Picture003.jpg[/img:f1dfe89643]

Micah and his wierd arm
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Atashi · Posted: Fri Sep 01, 2006 9:06 pm Post subject:

Ok ok, sooooo constructive criticism??

Hmmm Orex, I believe that the ears are a lil too low. I know that drawing a face with that point of view is pretty difficult and I see that you cover the other eye with the bangs. XD Ummm the Pecs (hoping this is a guy...otherwise...that is one buff girl! Shocked

) You dont have to draw out the Pectoralis Major (rite??) like that. How to put this....uh...nvm...the arms looks uh, boneless. ^^;;; fix it up like your 3rd pic. =P Ummm iunno what else to say bout this one.

Movin on, Ethil!

the foot looks weird. ^^;;; the left shoulder went a lil too low. Razz

Micah! the other arm is really buff for his body. Shocked

Fat fingers.. XD

This looks good. Very Happy

Keep on drawing!! Hoorah!! *goes off*
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trueline · Pure Hope Joined: Jun 13, 2006 Posts: 5134

lets see.....
Orexdahb... im not sure if its a girl but whats wrong with her right hand why theres no fingers or u meant to draw it cut hand ....then its ok.
Ethil ... i didnt knew hes laying down but the shading beneth it did a great job....
the last pic is the best of them unless u should say weird arms ....uh i see both are weird...
ur a good drawer but keep practicing to be much better..
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Toack · newbie! Joined: Jul 26, 2005 Posts: 44

Well i hope you dont take it the wrong way but your draws are really bad like a 10 years old boy (i dont know your age)

I started drawing similar to you (i think i do it better now Embarassed

), and i think that the two points you have to take care of immediately are:

1.- Dont be afraid to see and use references, i dont mean to copy draws but if you are going to draw a hand, look at your hand, it helps a lot.

2.- Expend time on your draws, good jobs are not done en 10 minutes, they take hours and usually shared between days (master pieces take months!)

I dont like to critic, i dont know either why im doing it right now.. hope this help you but i had a reeeeeally bad feeling Sad

PD: I forgot to mention that if you are seeking for a own style and stetic, my opinion is useless as long as you are satisfied with your work
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shonenjumpgirl · Yari Ashigaru Joined: Jan 26, 2006 Posts: 226

guess i need practice

toack- i'm actually 14 years old and i'm a female actually

Toack · newbie! Joined: Jul 26, 2005 Posts: 44

The last one remembered me the most of me becoming a drawer. Well i hope you dont hate me for what i said Crying or Very sad

So for now, all you need to do is practice, i dont believe that practice makes the master because masters usually have natural skills, but practice makes you improve a lot Very Happy

Keep drawing
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xkrazydog · Heimin (Commoner) Joined: Aug 17, 2005 Posts: 96

Practice human anatomy, perspective and proportions.

shonenjumpgirl · Yari Ashigaru Joined: Jan 26, 2006 Posts: 226

doujo · Posted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 9:51 pm Post subject:

haha, you have a problem with drawing girls, while i have a problem with drawing guys -.-'

as somebody else already said, you need to work on your proportions. Overall, your drawings are quite good though. The shoulders of the first girl are too round. The boobs a little too high, and the top part a little small.
The second girl you draw, the top part too is a little small as well =P. Or rather, the legs are too short! Laughing

the head seems a little big i think. Don't accentuate too much her elbow, it's a little too pointy ^.~ and the feet... well, i guess you need some practice =P Oh yeah, and there again, shoulders a little too round ^.~ but that second girl looks better than the first i think ^^
hope to see some more of your drawings soon!~

Atashi · Posted: Sun Sep 03, 2006 8:51 am Post subject:

OoooOOooo

A new pic?? Iunno why but the new drawing looks a lil manly at teh torso. ^^;;; Maybe the round shoulders? The neck is off. Also, the clothing she's wearing has that sharp point triangle, making it looks like she has one uber wedgie. Laughing

Is it just me that sees that?? Or am I just a lil too picky?? ^^;;
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