my Original Characters

naruchan · Heimin (Commoner) Joined: Nov 19, 2004 Posts: 74

drew this for my online manga Devil Hunters http://www.drunkduck.com/Devil_Hunters

other than tsubasa's (the girl) had being too big... what else could i improve and what do you think? and if you read my manga... how can i improve that? i need help -.-
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DrJackal · Jikan Samurai Joined: Mar 14, 2004 Posts: 979

Hmm looking at that picture you posted the left hand and the right arm are too big. Btw the manga link you posted doesn't work.

masamonkey · Posted: Wed Dec 29, 2004 6:03 am Post subject:

I like it a lot. I had problems with the manga too, but am interested in seeing it.
As for critique, I don't think her expression really fits. She looks like she's really embaressed or intimidated. I think it's the eyebrows, they don't look like happy eyebrows.

leonhartgoh · newbie! Joined: Dec 12, 2004 Posts: 49

oh my...

...........so cute..........

THE SITE!!! FIX IT!! T.T

chineseboy65 · newbie! Joined: Dec 07, 2004 Posts: 4 Location: concord

wow, nice artwork, and i dont know if it's just me but there seems so be somethin wrong with the site

naruchan · Heimin (Commoner) Joined: Nov 19, 2004 Posts: 74

i think something's up with the host site because its not working on my end either... they're probably up for maintanence or something *sweatdrop*
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naruchan · Heimin (Commoner) Joined: Nov 19, 2004 Posts: 74

masamonkey · Posted: Wed Dec 29, 2004 9:49 pm Post subject:

I don't see a problem with the arm either. It's just a baggy sleeve. Hopefully your site will be up soon.

the_backs · Posted: Thu Dec 30, 2004 3:08 am Post subject:

I really like the picture,
the site worked for me , i read the first chapter and i enjoyed it!!,
btw didu use a scanner for ur manga??

91KaGeBuShIn · Heimin (Commoner) Joined: Nov 02, 2004 Posts: 55

the right hand seems a lil..big...
but.. i love that cute lil guy thinger that she's holdin XD

masamonkey · Posted: Fri Dec 31, 2004 3:10 am Post subject:

Link worked for me now too. I liked it and you can see your art getter better. I think you may need some help with panel transitions though.

naruchan · Heimin (Commoner) Joined: Nov 19, 2004 Posts: 74

3V1L_3R1C · Posted: Mon Jan 10, 2005 8:21 pm Post subject:

Nice work. The webcomic shows a lot of promise. The only problem I have with the art is that sometimes the purportions on the head are a bit off.

The site itself, however, needs improvement. Navigating is easy enough, you just need to make it more appealingto the eye, but I don't think it's a huge problem.

All in all, I do agree that it's getting better, just keep at it and don't get discouraged.

Kaijiin · Posted: Mon Jan 10, 2005 8:28 pm Post subject:

they look cute
nice work

Cornel · Yari Ashigaru Joined: Dec 05, 2004 Posts: 290

The background layer you did for that picture is neat. How did you make it?