A preview of my manga

Takasan · Posted: Fri Oct 28, 2005 10:37 pm Post subject: A preview of my manga

Actually to tell the truth this is actually my project for my Advance Drawing class. Embarassed

We had to make a comic Razz

so I decided to make a page about my story. That's the male and female lead for one of the series. It was very difficult for me to draw these with Ink pens, I had no experience in any of the stuff we had to do. And the coloring was a bit rushed - you can even see that I have a few spots I missed. Mad

Since my hand writing was bad I decide to redo that with text. But Paint had such big text Mad

and I don't yet know how to use the Text function with my other program. Embarassed

So I'm sorry if you can't read the text.

At the begining I was going to post the regular size but it was over the 300 KB limit so I had to resize that thing. However the size on the screen is not much off from the real thing which is 8.5x11. Well, tell me what you guys think![/img]
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Doukutsu-Monogatari · Posted: Fri Oct 28, 2005 11:13 pm Post subject:

Nice. I don't really like the male's design, but the female looks spot on. Your choice of colours were nice, albeit a bit unorthodox as far as general comic colour palettes go.

One problem --- that Ninja head protector is from Naruto. I think you should just be a tad more original in that aspect and replace it with something else.

Anyway, good work. Keep at it.

sayoku · Posted: Fri Oct 28, 2005 11:52 pm Post subject:

mmm i have a hate for crayons, some times it gives an unnecessary texture, and go easy on the lines a bit, try make it neater.

the layout and the direction/angle/gesture of view is pretty good, keep it up!
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ThaMahin · Posted: Sat Oct 29, 2005 12:02 am Post subject:

Wow, amazing art work. The rips in the skirt looks really nice. How long have you been drawing?I agree with Doukutsu-Monogatari the head protector need more work, the design on the protector looks like a lil boat. Overall its superV.

*Post your other works*
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Takasan · Posted: Sat Oct 29, 2005 12:48 am Post subject:

Ahaha...I guess it does look like I copied it from Naruto lol. Laughing

(who knows...I probably did..don't remember Confused

) I'll work on that. i try to make my guys different than others but since people don't seem to like how my guys look I'll post some new sketches. Thanks guys I'll be sure to do this over in the real thing though. It'll probably be much easier on the comp than it is with an ink pen and ink well, but who knows I could be wrong. Hmm..it seems it I still have a long way to go before I can become professional lol.
But I'll keep trying! Thanks guys!

Oh and btw [ThaMahin] I have posted my earlier works...not sure if you saw them or not since they are back in the 2-4 pages. Thanks!
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DrJackal · Jikan Samurai Joined: Mar 14, 2004 Posts: 979

kool beans the guy looks a bit funny but i like the background and everything else .

LuKai_Ru · Posted: Sat Oct 29, 2005 3:40 pm Post subject:

Nice artwork!! very kool and good details add into it
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razor_alchemist · Yari Ashigaru Joined: Jun 18, 2005 Posts: 385

Wow thats awesome. So what is the story about? Do you think you want to be a mangaka? I think you would do a pretty good job.

Takasan · Posted: Sun Oct 30, 2005 6:45 pm Post subject:

1ce · Posted: Sun Oct 30, 2005 9:43 pm Post subject:

Hey, thats some great work liked i've seen from you before, but like the others have said, the characters need a bit of working. Based on layout, the manga is fine and the colouring was rather decent. Would be better than anything I can do Razz

blue_bee_pie · newbie! Joined: Oct 27, 2005 Posts: 11

the comic is not good overall but I think the lines need to be a bit more cleancut but the colouring is good! ^_^ Keep up the good work!

skydragon325 · Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2005 3:17 am Post subject:

The comic is aite but i think you can make it better=].

Takasan · Posted: Fri Nov 04, 2005 9:47 pm Post subject:

Thanks [1ce]. I agree with you, I too believe I need to work on my characters a bit more.

CGY · Posted: Fri Nov 04, 2005 10:56 pm Post subject:

That really is interesting... but I have trouble to read some of the words...

Anyway, cool stuffs you have there, and good luck on yours!

chimp · Posted: Tue Nov 08, 2005 8:36 pm Post subject:

the story seems interesting but if you put more time and work on your drawing i would really like it Very Happy